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&REW
12-09-2011, 03:43 PM
I havnt posted here in aggeess. I am that same 17 year old who asked for critique and I was told to use more natural light. So I did a shoot at muriwai with my friend :)

http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/252/7/0/untitled1_by_napoleonart-d49de29.jpg

http://th03.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2011/252/a/5/untitled2_by_napoleonart-d49de7q.jpg

http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/252/f/1/untitled3_by_napoleonart-d49debg.jpg

http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/252/8/d/untitled6_by_napoleonart-d49df1g.jpg

http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/252/e/2/untitled7_by_napoleonart-d49df30.jpg

http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/252/1/9/untitled12_by_napoleonart-d49dff8.jpg

http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/254/5/e/untitled17_by_napoleonart-d49iyi1.jpg

http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/252/4/1/untitled5_by_napoleonart-d49dezd.jpg

http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/252/2/9/untitled8_by_napoleonart-d49df4l.jpg

http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/252/6/f/untitled10_by_napoleonart-d49df90.jpg

http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/252/1/8/untitled13_by_napoleonart-d49dfhr.jpg

http://th00.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/254/1/2/untitled22_by_napoleonart-d49iz3f.jpg

http://th04.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2011/254/1/1/untitled20_by_napoleonart-d49iyvs.jpg

http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/254/4/5/untitled23_by_napoleonart-d49iz5y.jpg

http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/254/2/d/untitled24_by_napoleonart-d49iz8q.jpg

http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/252/c/7/untitled9_by_napoleonart-d49df6d.jpg

smurff
13-09-2011, 08:46 PM
not bad, some nice concepts there.

just a few things, not major, just to keep an eye on
some seem a little under exposed and the white balance is off, this may not be helping with the under exposer.
then just watch you horizons, on picture 2 and 14 the horizon is just about level but off enough to be noticeable.

-Smurff

Lazlo Woodbine
16-09-2011, 12:30 PM
1 and 2 are both really nice. They look slightly cross processed to me rather than wrong white balance and I like it. I am viewing on my tv though and I'm not a calibrated monitor like I usually do. I'm not entirely sure about the framing in the 2nd shot, especially the foot cut off the bottom.

3 and 4 don't work as well for me. They're under exposed as Smurff says and just not as interesting as the first 2.

The headshots of 5,6 and 7 have good and bad points. 5 looks soft. I don't like the coat over her head in 6 as it makes her look hunchbacked but I really like the light and expression on her face. Lovely backlight in 7 too.

8 is a nice thought but there looks like there was a better composition there somewhere if you'd taken more time over it.

9 I really like. Lovely tones.

10 is almost there but looks soft again. Maybe a web resizing issue?

11 is good but possibly not the most flattering for her.

12 and 13 I really don't like the camera tilt. It's just too much and makes here look like she is going to fall out of frame. Everything else in 13 is really good though. 12 is underexposed.

14 looks soft again, though it almost works because of her expression.

15 has an even worse angle which completely ruins it.

16 is great!

Plenty of flaws to work on, but really interesting set and great use of light. You can improve on the technical side easily enough but it's clear from these that you have an eye for beuatiful photographs. Apologies for the lengthy reply if you weren't looking for in depth critique.

ROSCOE
21-09-2011, 02:48 PM
Muriwai looks nice I haven't shot out there yet. I'm liking number 9.
Don't be afraid to use post to correct exposure especially if shooting in Raw.
Keep shooting!! Look forward to seeing more posts.